P.S- Snow, for me is Grey..!!

(I wrote this for Writers Lounge. The theme being 'Winter stories'. It was written with a word limit of 400 words. And for a change, it has no humor. :))

Some kind of a realization dawned. He troubled his old muscles as he glanced up at the somber sky and scratched his chin- “It will only get worse.” His cheeks were sunken and hollow; his eyes depicted poverty. It was Christmas and he was at work; he poked at the far side of the grave with his spade and it split wide open.

I love Christmas, more so for the gifts that continues to flow into the next day, my Birthday. Adoring the season’s first snow fall outside my little window, I awaited my tenth birthday. My dad owns a bakery, my mom’s a school teacher. There’s another boy in my home; dad says he’s my brother. My mom's love towards me is infinite. I love her but I hate my dad. For two reasons- he gifts nicer things to my brother; He never talks to mom. Meanwhile, the snowfall intensified and I noticed mom. She sat in a corner, her eyes, as though set deep inside their sockets. I waited for dad as she sat still, dangerously still.



He cursed the relentless snowfall, which was making his job tougher. But he had to do it, for his living. His face appeared as though it had lived with pain as a constant companion. He leaned over his spade and started to dig again.

My mom hadn’t moved an inch, I got tensed. Just then my dad arrived. He surprised me with a hug and hurried towards mom and put his arms over her shoulder. Her head collapsed into his chest. For the first time I noticed a tear drop down my dad’s cheeks. He shook her face vigorously until finally mom moved. That relieved me; the snow outside appeared better now.

He finished his job of digging, covered his face with a scarf against the snow and waited impatiently.

Within a minute, I saw my mom burst into tears. My dad hugged her and brought her to me. My mom hugged me tight; she didn’t want them to put me into the coffin. I couldn’t hug her back, I couldn’t say I loved her, I couldn’t even cry. The snow turned grey to my eyes yet again.

I had to be taken to the graveyard; the old man was waiting. I made him struggle, but I made his Christmas. My parents, I love them. By the way, my name is Kevin.


WORD COUNT = 399

13 comments:

  Matangi Mawley

December 1, 2009 at 9:41 PM

Hey.. that was very good!!! I mean.. I didn't guess what was going to happen.. But i was surprised! U r versatile.. good one arjun! keep writing...

  Ria

December 2, 2009 at 10:25 AM

that kept me on the edge....was a thriller of sorts.

  Harshita

December 2, 2009 at 11:14 PM

:(

Although the post is really really gud.. it depressed me...

  Saurabh Panshikar

December 3, 2009 at 12:03 AM

You are the master dude!

Hats off to you!

  lachu

December 3, 2009 at 6:47 AM

wow....no coments..no words to say

  Arjun

December 3, 2009 at 11:29 AM

Thanks guys... Thnks all of u ... :)

Glad u liked it... Sorry for the sad story though.. :)

Thanks..!!
Arjun

  Priya Joyce

December 3, 2009 at 6:43 PM

this one ws reely tuching arjun...
i dun reely hav words...
wonderfully expressed...

  Inty swetha

December 3, 2009 at 10:27 PM

Rai .. neku enta talent unda??? I'm surprised ra! I'm devastated at the end! thats very depressing.... You are a superb emotional writer.. keep posting such things too..

  Swetha Padakandla

December 4, 2009 at 1:14 PM

oooops
what was that?
i didn't expect this at all.. :(

but frankly, wonderful write up.
soooooper minga!!

cheers
swetha

  Saket Ranjan

December 5, 2009 at 1:52 AM

nice one arjun!! that too in 400 words, it is very difficult for me when given word limit. u are really versatile

  mizindependent

December 6, 2009 at 1:20 AM

wow
that was ...
good, and
depressing arjun ...
great really great
but but why must you make me sad da?
=(

  Saurabh Panshikar

December 11, 2009 at 7:45 PM

Thanks a lot for taking time to go through my blog. In one way or other you have encouraged me to keep on blogging.
Thanks a lot!

  mona

December 20, 2009 at 9:41 AM

wow arjun... that was awesome!!!